Sunday, November 1, 2015

MMC #10

Here's my Monday Minute Challenge for this week.  If writing is something you are interested in but you just need something to get the creative juices flowing, then I highly recommend participating! :)
Here is the link: http://christiswrite.blogspot.com/

301 words and I used the sentence prompt :)


He was almost there.  He could feel it in his bones.  The rolling water and crashing waves no longer had any effect on him.  He leaned forward against the stern of the boat, his azure eyes straining to see through the dark and misty haze.
A little whimper from a small bundle next to him revealed that he was not alone.  “Mannie,” whispered a frail girl that shared the same blue eyes as him. “I’m c-cold.”
The young man turned around and held her tiny hand in his.  “It will be okay, little Jess.  We’re nearly there.  You will be warm and well.”  But even as he said it, he worried that this little wisp of a child would not be able to withstand the last leg of the journey.  He leaned forward towards his little sister and stroked her tangled hair gently.  “Do you remember, little Jess, the One who commands the sea?”
The sorrow in her pale face was replaced with a peaceful expression.  “Jesus.”
He smiled.  “That’s right.  If he is so very mighty, would he want us to be afraid or untrusting?”
She shook her head.  “No.”  In a fit of coughing, she ducked her head down beneath the damp wool blanket. 
The brother patted his sister’s head once more before taking ore in hand and turning back towards the sea. 
Let the little one sleep while she can.
 The young man, through the coming waves ahead, beheld the future.  The horizon was growing dark and dismal, as if the sun had all but disappeared forever and night and mist were declaring their reign of terror. 
Before it happened, the young man clasped his trembling sister in his arms one last time.  Gently, softly, the killing wind tossed the boat over the edge and into Heaven’s embrace.

7 comments:

  1. This is amazing and so emotional! Wonderfully done, Natalie!

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  2. Wow, I am speechless! This was wonderful Natalie!!! I loved it!

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    1. Aww, thanks Shelby!! It's so wonderful to receive encouragement from fellow writers. :))

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  3. I love this, Natalie! Awesome job:D

    I also wanted to let you know that I tagged you for The Song Tag, if you're interested. You can go here to check it out: http://ingodswritinghands.blogspot.com/2015/11/songs.html

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    1. Thank you!! ^_^ I will check out the Song Tag. :)

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  4. I love this story!
    You are talented.
    Do you like baking?If so I am nominating you for my new tag, "Bakers Dozen"You don't have to do it but it would be awesome if you could.The questions:1.what is your favourite thing to bake?2.how old were you when you first started baking?3.what is one baking gadget/tool that you CANNOT live without?4.what is your least favourite thing to bake?5. Brownies or pie?6.cupcakes or cookies?7.if you had to choose between Baking 100 pies or 1000 cupcakes which would you choose?8.what is your favourite thing to bake for breakfast?9.what is the worst/funniest kitchen mistake that has happened to you?10. Have you ever tried any french or Italian desserts? Did you like them?11.how often do you bake?12.what is your favourite cupcakes flavor?13. Favourite frosting?Please tag at least one other person by name.You can either use these questions or make up your own for them. And please link back to my blog.,chattychickie.blogspot.com .Thank you!:-)

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